There are two camps that I am going to talk about. One is called "Big Apple" and the other one is called "Ranchwest". Big apple, this is for three weeks and is very intensive. You prepare for big exams like SAT or TOEFL. I mean, these tests are for adults not for children like us. So I think it is prefered to be called as "study camp" or "preparing for adult rest camp". Whereas Ranchwest has much more freedom. We can chose what we can study from music, math, science, art etc. So you can study on the thing you like the most. Now I will talk specificly about these two camps and compare or contrast those two camps.
First, Big Apple which is in a dormitory is much more intensive than Ranchwest. It isthree weeks but all you do is study, study, study. The teachers that are teaching the students are from U.S universities and there degree is M.A which is masters degree. Masters degree is the highest degree if you are not going to be a doctor. So the professors willl have good skills of teaching. As a result, it can be effective on just learning English but, on my opinion, I don't just like studying the whole day. We kids have to get some rest, get to know each other and play with each other.
Second, there is Ranchwest which the students live in a home-stay. Ranchwest is a 4 week program and this may be study, study, study like Big Apple but the students do not just study English. The students study another subject in English. For example, music, literature, music, politics, art, computer programmig etc. A subject the students really like or a subject that the students are curious about. So you study another subject in English. That could be beneficial because the students study the subject they like and they study it in English. However, you canonly study that one subject for the whole camp as a result that might be the cons of this camp.
CONTRASTING
On one hand, Big Apple is a very intensive program. On the other hand, though, Ranchwest has some more freedom. Big Apple only focuses on English. However Ranchwest, the students can choose a subject that the students like. Also, Big Apple is for three weeks. In contrast, Ranchwest is for four weeks. In addition, Big Apple you live in dormitories but in Ranchwest, you are in a home-stay situation. One more, Big Apple is in the urban areas on the contrary, Ranchwest is sort of in the rural areas.
COMPARING
On comparing, of course, they are both an English camp. Also, both camps enjoy interesting activities. Big Apple enjoys activities in the urban side. For example, tours of the city, trips to the local museums, and tickets to broadway shows. Big Apple's activities are more educational. Alike Big Apple, Ranchwest enjoys activities but extreme activities. Such as river rafting, hiking, canoeing, and mountain biking.
When you use the transition words correctly, you don't need to have separate sections titled "comparing" and "contrasting". Those should be included in the main pars of the essay. Nice work overall, though.
답글삭제what's your decision?Ranch West Camp or big apple?
답글삭제Anyways, good job!
I think that is good.
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